ext_1840 ([identity profile] forlornhope42.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] sealie 2007-07-01 07:01 pm (UTC)

Oooh, I need a heart icon to express my feelings about this story!

Anyhoo, I promised a comment, and here it is: This part is brilliant.

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No, wait, it deserves some more words, if you don't mind. I read it at the office, could spare some time for it. It was a morning when I was feeling queasy, and with all the detail you packed in I was going wobbly from the excitement. But after reading, I was one happy bunny.

A few details: Sheppard's reluctance to succumb to medical treatment. As I've mentioned, all the medical detail you've packed into this. You're Carson is such a professional and a caring person at the same time, like with the nurse he chose to take care of Grant, it makes my heart sing.

The way Grant sleeps - too cute! The moment Carson gave Sheppard to watch Rodney sleep - loved it! Grant's point of view of people, events, his description of flyboy, his comparison between Rodney and their grandfather - that was spot on!

Grant as a minion was sweet :-)

And I'm sure Grant will see to it that Rodney gets his fortnight of rest, no doubt about that.

Rodney's little snot experiment - eww! But so true to life! :-)

And that gob of phlegm on Sheppard - that was funny, even more so his reaction!!!

Question:

A rich voice, caught been a tenor and comfort,

Do you mean "between" here? Or am I missing something? My English isn't exactly 100%, and I sometimes need further explanations.


In conclusion: This was awesome!!!

*glomps you, precious*
S. (petal, iIrc :-D)


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